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I drank tonight and called your name.
I longed to see your face,
But things will always stay the same
And mem\'ries aren\'t erased.

I take the time to let you know
That you were all my dreams.
And, sure enough, I\'ll never show
You\'ve sewn me at my seams.

Worthy, though, I\'ll never be.
I ask for none from you,
Except to know, inside of me,
I\'ll stay to still love you.

Kindling; the fire\'s out,
Bringing me no warmth;
And love has now, without a doubt,
Brought me straight to harm.

Voices call, and call to rise,
Ending by the dawn.
I watch the sun against my eyes,
And burn to still go on.

Embers leave my anguish as
I fought the shame and strife,
Sinking lower, and so fast,
And never brought to life.

I ask one single thing of you,
As I open my heart,
(Please, do not speak of this as true
From all that ends this start.)

Remember me, and all you see,
And hold this sure, always;
For, though I go again to be
The wretch on streets for days,

My love for you cannot subside,
And sacrifice in choice.
From my soul, I could have died
For you, to hear my voice.

I\'ll give my life until the end
For all those dear to you,
For all your love, for all your friends,
For Lucie: I love you.
©2003-2009 ~midnightangel59
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This piece was written one night for homework from my English class. We were to write letters to Lucie Manette as one of her three suitors, from A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens. My favorite character in this favorite book of mine was Sydney Carton. He gave his life for her, because he happened to look like her husband (Charles Darnay). He kept her happy. In Chapter 13, in much time before her marriage, he confessed his love to her. I tried my best to capture it in poetry.

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Interesting use of old english and rhyme and rythem.

Very done as well, which is no small thing.

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I like this. Most poems on this topic are quite cheezy, but yours comes accross quite poignantly.....like it could be murmured. I can see where the original text is woven in here, and you've done quite a nice job of incorporating it. The part where you say "from all that ends this start" seems to be added for the rhyme and doesn't make much sense. I find that my poetry tends to be better when I focus less on rhyming, because it's hard to put your thoughts truly into words when you are concerned about rhyming. Aside from a few lines, you've done a beautiful job of keeping the mood of this piece with the rhyme scheme, and using the rhyming as a tool to make the poem flow better. Great work.
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This is awesome, I can really hear Sydney's voice in this~

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March 1, 2003

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